Original Radio Drama Plot

Pembroke Gardens
The idea for Pembrooke Gardens came from the want to start and end with a murder, as with our previous research into dramas show that drama and mystery are very popular.
Set in Kensington, London, upon the titled street, Pembroke Gardens this is an ongoing soap, with this episode centering around murder mystery/thriller themes. Drawing inspiration from TV soaps, 'Murder she wrote' and Agatha Christie.

Characters
Major characters:
Lara Windsor
Mid fourties, cold and calculated, manipulative and controlling yet subtle in her approach. Obsessed with her lover and not her husband.
Married to Jonathon Windsor and having an affair with Gary Plackett

Jonathon Windsor
Mid fourties, closetted gay in a sham marriage, kind and caring but weak.
Lara's best friend and husband.

Susan Thursgrove
Late fifties, nosey neighbour, always has her fingers in everyone else's pies,
Single.

Minor Characters:
Sean
Mid-thirties, masculine.
Jonathon's lover and Lara's co-worker.

DCI Lisa Hughes
By the book police officer, astute and professional.

Gary Plackett (referenced)
Lara's lover. now deceased.

Plot
Teaser:
Susan is listening to jazz as she talking to her her dog, Winston. She hears shouting from next door followed by a scream.

Titles: Craig Armstrong - Escape 4:00-4:15

Scene 1:
Police turn up at Windsor household, Lara fakes her hysteria. Susan arrives, talks to police posing as unknowing. Seeing Lara's state, she asks the Police to return another time when she has calmed down. After the police have left, Susan turns on Lara and tries to blackmail her. Lara threatens Susan and she leaves.

Scene 2:
Jonathon comes home as ambulance, that police call for, leaves, he tries to console his wive, showing the true nature of their relationship.

Scene 3:
Lara leaves to 'go to the shops', waits for Susan to leave her house, tries to run her over, Susan narrowly jumps out of the way and survives.

Scene 4:
Lara returns home, hears noises upstairs, grabs gun for security. Finds Jonathon in bed with Sean, they argue and Lara shoots Sean. Cuts to Susan calling the police. Cuts to Lara arguing with Jonathon, police turn up, come up stairs just as Lara shoots Jonathon. Knowing she has no way out, Lara turns the gun on herself and commits suicide.

Problems with script:
 - Mid construction of the script we realised that the plot needed rewriting as the motive for Lara's killing spree was unjustified as she was, herself, having an affair and knew of Jonathan's sexuality.
 - We found out we cannot use any music that we haven't created, so the intro music and a couple of pieces throughout had to be removed.
 - If we were to shorten the script the continuity would be unstable, especially seeing as so much was to happen we would need to thoroughly explain some parts to explain what was going on.
 - Susan's motive for blackmail was flawed, as was what she wanted.
 - Lara's Character develops too fast, turning from spurned lover to killer too quickly.
 - The gay affair is not needed in the storyline whatsoever and the guy she's having an affair with doesn't have any backstory, only that Lara is obsessed with him.